Project 'Ernst&Young in Thailand and UK'
From: Anchalee Donsakul
Date: 09.09.99
Time: 19:57:12
Remote Name: 194.82.103.37
Comments
Ernst&Young is one of the 'Big 5' auditing company {2} in the world. It is an international company that has branches around the world. Although Ernst&Young has an {3} auditing service {4} as a*** {5} core business, it provides other services such {6} tax {7} , corporate finance, business risk consulting, information system assurance, investment and management consulting. This Project {8} is focusing {9} on management consulting service {10} :*** {11} in Thailand and United Kingdom.
The goal of Management Consulting Department is to help business to operate completely, correctly and effectively. In Thailand, the main service of management consultants is to reorganise companies. As Thailand is an economic growing country {12} , many businesses are expanding enormously and rapidly. Such companies have difficulties to operate within the companies {13} . As the numbers employed in the company grow, the structure become more complex; vertically the number of levels of management increases with the additional problem of delegation and control of each level; horizontally there are more separate working groups between which co-ordinating and communicating links must be established.
For reorganising, what we {14} do for customer's {15} company consists of 3 steps: current operation learning {16} , finding out the problems and making recommendation {17} . To learn {18} a current operation, staffs {19} from Ernst&Young are formed as {20} a team and relocate into customer's {21} office. The aim of this step is to take a clear look at the current operations of the business; {22} it covers the following area: history and background of the company, policy, products, markets, technology, planning control and the detail {23} of operation within the company. Therefore, all kinds of documents and all of people {24} in the company must be observed an {25} interviewed. During this step, process flow charts would {26} be created to clearly show the function of each person in detail.
Comment:
An introduction would be helpful explaining the issue and purpose, your methods and sources.
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NUMBER OF NOUN - you have put a word in the singular when it should be plural, or vice versa. Or perhaps the noun is countable and you thought it was uncountable, or vice versa. Check that you have used the right article, as well.
Comment:
plural!
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NOT THE BEST CHOICE - your meaning is clear but this is not a good way, or not the best way, to express it. This may relate to one word, or a phrase or a whole sentence. You may need to change the syntax or the vocabulary or both.
Comment:
provide may be better
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NUMBER OF NOUN - you have put a word in the singular when it should be plural, or vice versa. Or perhaps the noun is countable and you thought it was uncountable, or vice versa. Check that you have used the right article, as well.
Comment:
plural
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ARTICLE - you have made a mistake with the use of the article ( ie a, an, the or zero) with a noun or noun phrase. First check that you know whether the noun is countable or uncountable, and singular or plural
Comment:
their
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MARKER/CONNECTIVE - you may have used the wrong one, or not used one where it is needed, or used one incorrectly
Comment:
such as
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NOT THE BEST CHOICE - your meaning is clear but this is not a good way, or not the best way, to express it. This may relate to one word, or a phrase or a whole sentence. You may need to change the syntax or the vocabulary or both.
Comment:
tax advice
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PUNCTUATION - punctuation mistake. For example, you may have used a comma when it is not necessary, or a capital letter is required.
Comment:
no capital letter
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VERB TENSE - you have put the verb in the wrong tense eg present instead of future, or continuous instead of simple.
Comment:
focuses
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NUMBER OF NOUN - you have put a word in the singular when it should be plural, or vice versa. Or perhaps the noun is countable and you thought it was uncountable, or vice versa. Check that you have used the right article, as well.
Comment:
plural
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PUNCTUATION - punctuation mistake. For example, you may have used a comma when it is not necessary, or a capital letter is required.
Comment:
no punctuation required here
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PHRASE CONSTRUCTION - you have used the wrong construction after the verb/noun/adjective/adverb; for example, you might have used 'to' instead of 'that', or an '-ing' form instead of 'to' etc
Comment:
a country with a growing economy
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UNCLEAR - the reader does not understand what you are trying to say here
Comment:
the economy?
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REFERENCE - you have made a mistake in how you refer to something previously mentioned. You may have used the wrong word to do this; or it may not be clear what you are referring to, or the referent (= the thing you are referring to) may be too far away; or a pronoun is needed
Comment:
You have not established in this paper that you are actually part of E&Y Thailand, so using we comes as a bit of a surprise.
Error type:
ARTICLE - you have made a mistake with the use of the article ( ie a, an, the or zero) with a noun or noun phrase. First check that you know whether the noun is countable or uncountable, and singular or plural
Comment:
a customer's ...
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PHRASE CONSTRUCTION - you have used the wrong construction after the verb/noun/adjective/adverb; for example, you might have used 'to' instead of 'that', or an '-ing' form instead of 'to' etc
Comment:
surveying current operations
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ARTICLE - you have made a mistake with the use of the article ( ie a, an, the or zero) with a noun or noun phrase. First check that you know whether the noun is countable or uncountable, and singular or plural
Comment:
a
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PREPOSITION - you have used the wrong preposition, or the preposition is missing, or you don't need a preposition
Comment:
learn about
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NUMBER OF NOUN - you have put a word in the singular when it should be plural, or vice versa. Or perhaps the noun is countable and you thought it was uncountable, or vice versa. Check that you have used the right article, as well.
Comment:
staff has no plural form although it is countable
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VERB FORM - you have used the wrong form of the verb. For example, singular instead of plural, infinitive instead of -ing, wrong auxiliary, passive instead of active or vice versa, etc.
Comment:
form (no passive)
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ARTICLE - you have made a mistake with the use of the article ( ie a, an, the or zero) with a noun or noun phrase. First check that you know whether the noun is countable or uncountable, and singular or plural
Comment:
the
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PUNCTUATION - punctuation mistake. For example, you may have used a comma when it is not necessary, or a capital letter is required.
Comment:
A full stop will be better here.
Error type:
NUMBER OF NOUN - you have put a word in the singular when it should be plural, or vice versa. Or perhaps the noun is countable and you thought it was uncountable, or vice versa. Check that you have used the right article, as well.
Comment:
plural
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PHRASE CONSTRUCTION - you have used the wrong construction after the verb/noun/adjective/adverb; for example, you might have used 'to' instead of 'that', or an '-ing' form instead of 'to' etc
Comment:
all people
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SPELLING - the word is wrongly spelled.
Comment:
and
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VERB TENSE - you have put the verb in the wrong tense eg present instead of future, or continuous instead of simple.
Comment:
will